My essay illustrates the concept of making relationships more complicated than need be and losing at your own games. More specifically it resembles friendship when the dynamics change with age difference or position of power (such as a babysitter and child) and failing in completing the construction of your own fabricated game.
It was harder than I had originally anticipated to write about my experiences with the junior on my volleyball team last year because it forced me to realize how immaturely I handled the situation. After writing that section of my essay I actually went back and apologized to the girl.
If I could make changes to my essay it would most likely be revising some word choices to make them more interesting or appealing. I might also remove the small paragraph in the middle of my "Sally Greenwald" memory where it was my pondering over whether she would check on me again that night to see me angelically asleep mainly because I don't feel like it was my strongest writing or essential to the essay as a whole.
It was unexpected and a little fun to pour out the babysitter memory mainly because it is still vivid in my mind. But I was really surprised how easily I was able to format and write it because usually I'd struggle with processes like that.
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